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Welcome to Space 17's Writing Blog. We are a year 5 & 6 classroom at Kawaha Point Primary School. We would like to share some of our writing we do at school with you. Some of our writing will be written straight onto our blog, so our spelling and grammar might not always be perfect. If you like what you see/read please leave a comment.

Thursday 1 September 2011

The Monkey Saves the day!

I was in the jungle swinging to vine to vine at night with wolves’ running with me to run away from the hunters.

“The hunters are coming to shoot us!” I yelled. “So we need to get away from the hunters!”

We ran as far as we could we ran to the driest place in the jungle.

All of a sudden it started raining and became muddy. It was not fun at all now we were sad.

We were walking until nighttime and we were thirsty. We stopped and fell on the ground. We found a place to sleep in.

It was the morning when we woke up and walked to the lion king jungle.

We ran to the lion king and said “lion king can you help the jungle? The hunters are back and are shooting the animals up!”

“Run to the jungle monkey, when you are there have an invisible drink to turn you into an invisible monkey” replied the Lion King.

We were in the jungle. I was invisible and punched the hunter as hard as I could.

He was knocked out.

I the little monkey had saved the day and the animals sang a victory song for the monkey.
The Cheeky Chimp

The dark green shadows scattered across the forest floor. The glowing sun broke through towering emerald trees. The gushing sound of the cool aqua blue water echoed around the whole jungle.

The fierce tiger snarled as he heard rustling in the dark shadows. It was the cheeky chimp. His dream was to turn invisible to steal everyone’s supplies and food. He started to steal every ingredient he needed to create his own potion. The cheeky chimp laughed his evil laugh around the tree top canopy. He swooped down with his swirly vine and stealing all tigers stuff. Tiger was furious, he chomped on the chimp’s swirly vine and cheeky chimp came tumbling down. Cheeky chimp wasn’t so lucky this time.

But cheeky chimp didn’t give up, actually he planned much bigger. He decided to go to the big city and steal stuff from the famous laboratory. He swung from vine to vine and branch to branch. But it was dusk and the dark night was closing in. A storm slowly drifted over the jungle. A rolling thunder roared all night and it was hard for the chimp to get to sleep. A Lightning bolt struck and it illuminated the night sky.

In the morning the monkey made it to the city, it was much different from the jungle. The jungle was quiet and peaceful, and in the city cars beeped helicopters roared, boats splashed. Cheeky chimp was lost lonely and sad. He gave up and went back home

He apologised to all the people he stole from and gave their stuff back. The chimp that was the cheeky chimp was now the cheerful chimp.

Story Starter

We used Story Starter to find an exciting topic to write about. Our story starter we used was ' A cheeky monkey who wanted to be invisible!' We all wrote very different stories. We were learning to paint a picture in the readers head as we were writing.
We hope you like our stories!

Friday 8 July 2011

Ghost Town

It was a cold winter morning. A lonely tree stood in a paddock blowing and whistling in the wind. It was a horrid pitch black tree, which had lost all of it leaves. All that was left was branches falling off, from the top to the bottom.

It was like a ghost town because it was completely silent. Not even one noise could be heard, not even a bird was making a noise. The background was full of fog it felt extremely cold. The grass was a dark apple green.

I stood beneath the towering tree. I was extremely scared that I could not even take a single breath. I was shaking like someone had pushed me in a very cold lake. I turned quickly and ran into my house, rushed into my room and reached for my teddy. I cuddled it until the mist and scary day was completely over.

Emily

The Tree

The damp frosty air froze the innocent bits of tiny green grass. The dark naked tree stood still and quiet as the rustling wind scattered across the dark bark of the tree.

I slowly started across the freezing, crystal frosty grass towards the dark, naked tree. I sat down and the rustle of the small branches sounded like flies desperately crashing against the thin window trying to get out.

When I was sitting down I thought about the tree and its thin branches, dark brown bark and the fact that there was not a single leaf on it. Suddenly I heard a voice. A cold feeling rushed down my throat. Someone was watching me! Who was that person?

I quickly stood up as the noise faded in the distance and I turned around. No one was there. I sprinted down the foggy field and ran down the road back to where my house was and I was safe.

By Ben

In the Mist

The swirling mist flew swiftly through the chilly air and settled around a bare lonely tree. The trees branches were only just visible in the morning gloom. The dark branches on the tree were tangled and ragged, they swayed slightly in the gentle breeze. The pea green grass surrounding the tree was sparkling with crystal coloured frost, making everything have a magical feel to it. You could hear nothing. Not even the slightest noise or a bird. The whole place was coated in silence.

A swing was hanging dejectedly on the trees worn branches. It had been sitting in the silence, hanging on the trees for centuries. For the first time in many years the silence was broken as a young girl crunched on the frost. The delicately formed dewdrops burst as she gently stood on them. She sat on the dusty swing and thought. The only noise for miles was the sound of the old rusty swing ropes creaking gently as the swing moved. Goosebumps prickled the girl’s skin. She was afraid of the deathly silence and ghostly whispers. She ran.

The wind whistled in her ears and she was gone. The tree in the paddock had banished its intruder, leaving it coated in silence once again.

By Georgia

An Unusual Day

It was a cold shivering morning when a foggy mist took over the horizon and drifted through the country side .

The wind howled like wolves as the naked tree in distance crippled to bits.

Bark was scavenged from the tree as the howling wind fiercely collided with it.

Throughout the ghostly mist a glimpse in the distance slowly captured my eye I glared for a while at the beautiful grain field as it sparkled through the fog .

It was like a golden sea as the wind swiftly swayed it left to right shining in the mist.

The lime green grass then lifted beneath my feet as a light breeze swayed across my forehead I stopped when all of a
sudden an outline of a tree appeared out of nowhere.

Goosebumps poured across my body as it looked like a ghostly galleon sailing towards me I stared for a while then fainted.

By Izaya

The Winter Tree

Swish! The wind blew softly through the dark haunted, frosty tree with a violet sunrise in the distance. There was crackling frost on the dark green meadow floor. I could feel the icy cold breeze brushing into my face. It felt like I was frozen.

I walked out on to the dark crunching dew with my bear feet. Through the misty fog I stared down o the haunted tree.

I looked up and saw the rustling branches in the high tree.

Shivers crept down my back. I knew something was wrong and I slowly crept backwards towards my house and sat down by the fire.

By Ivan

Earthquake Earth…What?

A cold mist set in as the day drew to a foggy day. A bare tree crept into being a silent tree. The branches never twitched a bit as the wind never made a sound. Everything was silent.

A house sat near that tree. Its paint was as old as a person. As the wind came in and blew it with such force, it almost lost the roof.

Bill was peering at the naked tree outside, wondering what he could use it for. He also saw a lightning bolt flash into the raging grass as sound shocked the air with the big bang.

“Earthquake!” Bills mother shouted as she rushed under the wooden table, clinging to a wooden chair that was tucked in.

“That was only lightning,” Bill whispered as he started staring at the tree again.

By Arapeta

Winter Tree Stories


WALT Describe the setting.

In Space 17 we have been working hard to write descriptive stories which describe the setting so the reader can imagine they are there! We wrote stories to describe a picture of a lonely winter tree. We used our imagination and creativity to write about what we could see, feel, and hear. We hope you like our winter tree stories.

Sunday 19 June 2011

Cross Country 2011

Boom! Boom! Boom! My chest was pounding as I got ready to have a race. I was scared to go and race.

I thought I was going to lose to the race, but I was wrong. I was in the front. We had to do two laps. I was so happy Iwas going to win.

My dad was at the end of the race to tell us where to go around the tree and Bens mum said to go through the cones and over the fence.

I was on my second lap and keegan was coming second in the race. But I was sprtting to win the race! It was over.

I told my dad that I came first in the race. He was proud of me and my borther.

By Te Poho

Cross Country 2011

Cross Country on PhotoPeach

Cross country

“One more lap to go” I thought to myself as I convinced my body to push the limits and reach my goal. It was cross country and we were all super nervous.

It was the most blazing hot day ever and I felt like I was sizzling on a BBQ. The track was damp but the sun soon changed that.

“Ready, set, go!” commanded Miss Williams as we all rushed in a hurry. Another lap I thought as sweat trickled down my face.

I paced myself to the finish line and took another deep breath and collapsed on the tarpaulin. All of a sudden I felt a cold breeze as if Jack Frost ran past and left me to freeze. I quickly clutched onto my jersey and whipped it on. I was glad it was over!

By Diaz

On Friday we had our school Cross Country. We had to write an exciting recount about our cross country. We used our red thinking hat to write about how we felt. We had to keep our reader interested and make them enjoy our story. We tried to include some exciting adjectives.

Thursday 16 June 2011

My Adventure

Here I am I the middle of the Forest. I’ll tell you what happened.

I was on a huge fluffy cloud but then the cloud started to go black.

Suddenly I found myself tumbling from the sky and all my friends were screaming. We all landed on a soft leaf in the forest somewhere.

I tried finding my way home but I couldn’t find out the direction I landed. I was sitting on the bank next to a huge waterfall when it started to rain so I found some cover under a big green leaf.

In the morning there was a big slug in front of me and I started to run for my life. I finally got away from him and ran towards the river because I thought no one goes enemies would go there.

As I got closer I saw a bird and it swept me off my feet and then all of sudden he let go of me and I found myself beside my friends and I told them how I got there.

We all had a big sleep then and then I could feel the sun on me and then a big gust of wind grabbed us and took us up into the sky. We landed on a big fluffy cloud and our lives were much better.

By Alex